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       #Post#: 4752--------------------------------------------------
       One Man For Them Self [Denied]
       By: daflowergirl Date: February 1, 2013, 12:56 pm
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       :(This is it. The last days of the cruel earth, we will not
       have to live with painful politics, nor dreadful gas expense,
       nor worrying sick about your beloved mother.
       Oh, why you ask? They are taking over, they are green like green
       grass, blue eyes like the sea, and the size of a giant.
       They are the Kragos. They are coming and we will not live to
       tell anyone. We as in mankind its self. But us wizards know
       these things and shall tell you know. Be prepared because
       this;well you will see.
       "Another dang crewship?," Pa tiredly says. "Why can't we just
       rest!," he blerts out.
       "The Kragos don't rest so why should we?," I say. My names Jim,
       I live on a farm that
       is now like a mashed potato field thanks to these Kragos.
       "THERES ONE!," he screams,
       "Get the shotgun Jimmy Boy!," he yells. "Yes, Pa.," I calmly
       say. Jimmy Boy or Sonny Boy
       is the only name I ever get. I open the closet and grab the
       rusty antique shotgun. I throw him
       the old thing. "GENTLE!" He says. He shoots and grins. "With
       this sucker, we are protected!,"
       he proudly says. Later that night they stop going and Ma gets
       the dog house for arguing
       about how we will survive. Me and Pa were cold sitting by the
       toasty fire and he runs outside
       realizing what he had  done. He never comes back, nor any sign
       of them. I lay in bed all night
       waiting and decide to go looking for them. As I go out I see a
       little red light from a  bush.
       I see it as Pa's flashlight stained in blood, and start to run.
       As I run a Krago slices my head
       off and then it is over. So that is why we should always be
       aware of our anger, and espically
       it can be one man for themself. And that is what this story is
       about.
       Notes: This is 329 words.
       #Post#: 4753--------------------------------------------------
       Re: One Man For Them Self [Application]
       By: daflowergirl Date: February 1, 2013, 1:00 pm
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       The name is not a copy from ryan. I made this whole thing last
       week.
       #Post#: 4754--------------------------------------------------
       Re: One Man For Them Self [Application]
       By: bob123f Date: February 1, 2013, 1:01 pm
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       The limit of 500 characters has now been extended to 500 words.
       #Post#: 4756--------------------------------------------------
       Re: One Man For Them Self [Application]
       By: daflowergirl Date: February 1, 2013, 1:03 pm
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       You like?? :(
       #Post#: 4758--------------------------------------------------
       Re: One Man For Them Self [Application]
       By: bob123f Date: February 1, 2013, 1:07 pm
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       Application Status:
       Denied.
       Reason:
       The story had almost no plot. No character arcs were experienced
       in the story, and we barely got to learn anything about the
       characters. This is what I call a "Story Fragment", because it
       could be a part of one whole story. Try to avoid these at all
       times. There were also a few typos, as always.
       You may reapply on Feb. 15.
       #Post#: 4759--------------------------------------------------
       Re: One Man For Them Self [Application]
       By: daflowergirl Date: February 1, 2013, 1:27 pm
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       Um, I like the style of how I did it but ok... :-[
       #Post#: 4760--------------------------------------------------
       Re: One Man For Them Self [Denied]
       By: bob123f Date: February 1, 2013, 1:54 pm
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       [quote author=daflowergirl link=topic=418.msg4759#msg4759
       date=1359746860]
       Um, I like the style of how I did it but ok... :-[
       [/quote] I'm really sorry, but I am required to do this.
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