(DIR) Return Create A Forum - Home --------------------------------------------------------- mrd Graphics (HTM) https://mrdgames.createaforum.com --------------------------------------------------------- ***************************************************** (DIR) Return to: Writing Applications ***************************************************** #Post#: 4752-------------------------------------------------- One Man For Them Self [Denied] By: daflowergirl Date: February 1, 2013, 12:56 pm --------------------------------------------------------- :(This is it. The last days of the cruel earth, we will not have to live with painful politics, nor dreadful gas expense, nor worrying sick about your beloved mother. Oh, why you ask? They are taking over, they are green like green grass, blue eyes like the sea, and the size of a giant. They are the Kragos. They are coming and we will not live to tell anyone. We as in mankind its self. But us wizards know these things and shall tell you know. Be prepared because this;well you will see. "Another dang crewship?," Pa tiredly says. "Why can't we just rest!," he blerts out. "The Kragos don't rest so why should we?," I say. My names Jim, I live on a farm that is now like a mashed potato field thanks to these Kragos. "THERES ONE!," he screams, "Get the shotgun Jimmy Boy!," he yells. "Yes, Pa.," I calmly say. Jimmy Boy or Sonny Boy is the only name I ever get. I open the closet and grab the rusty antique shotgun. I throw him the old thing. "GENTLE!" He says. He shoots and grins. "With this sucker, we are protected!," he proudly says. Later that night they stop going and Ma gets the dog house for arguing about how we will survive. Me and Pa were cold sitting by the toasty fire and he runs outside realizing what he had done. He never comes back, nor any sign of them. I lay in bed all night waiting and decide to go looking for them. As I go out I see a little red light from a bush. I see it as Pa's flashlight stained in blood, and start to run. As I run a Krago slices my head off and then it is over. So that is why we should always be aware of our anger, and espically it can be one man for themself. And that is what this story is about. Notes: This is 329 words. #Post#: 4753-------------------------------------------------- Re: One Man For Them Self [Application] By: daflowergirl Date: February 1, 2013, 1:00 pm --------------------------------------------------------- The name is not a copy from ryan. I made this whole thing last week. #Post#: 4754-------------------------------------------------- Re: One Man For Them Self [Application] By: bob123f Date: February 1, 2013, 1:01 pm --------------------------------------------------------- The limit of 500 characters has now been extended to 500 words. #Post#: 4756-------------------------------------------------- Re: One Man For Them Self [Application] By: daflowergirl Date: February 1, 2013, 1:03 pm --------------------------------------------------------- You like?? :( #Post#: 4758-------------------------------------------------- Re: One Man For Them Self [Application] By: bob123f Date: February 1, 2013, 1:07 pm --------------------------------------------------------- Application Status: Denied. Reason: The story had almost no plot. No character arcs were experienced in the story, and we barely got to learn anything about the characters. This is what I call a "Story Fragment", because it could be a part of one whole story. Try to avoid these at all times. There were also a few typos, as always. You may reapply on Feb. 15. #Post#: 4759-------------------------------------------------- Re: One Man For Them Self [Application] By: daflowergirl Date: February 1, 2013, 1:27 pm --------------------------------------------------------- Um, I like the style of how I did it but ok... :-[ #Post#: 4760-------------------------------------------------- Re: One Man For Them Self [Denied] By: bob123f Date: February 1, 2013, 1:54 pm --------------------------------------------------------- [quote author=daflowergirl link=topic=418.msg4759#msg4759 date=1359746860] Um, I like the style of how I did it but ok... :-[ [/quote] I'm really sorry, but I am required to do this. *****************************************************