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       #Post#: 5026--------------------------------------------------
       The Gem of The Gods-Maxliam Writer Application [Approved]
       By: maxliam Date: February 5, 2013, 9:09 am
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       As I walk through the meadows of my church, a tear catches my
       eye,
       For, I praise god for thee great things, I see the grain, and
       all the rye,
       The grass, so elegantly soft, so luscious, so silky. But then
       over all of
       the excitement and joy, I find; Perhaps I shouldn’t be here. I
       realize
       what I have done and who shall pay, and who shall weep against
       their
       husband’s dead body. If one is to find me, they will find no
       more than
       a broken body damp with tears, and blood. If I am to die on this
       spot,
       I want to wish my kids a good luck for their future goals, such
       as college,
       and marriage, and them starting their own family. If I am to
       miss that only
       because of one little mistake I will do, and I  have probably
       already done,
       then I wish everyone good luck. Now, why am I so in peril, and
       scared?
       I have stolen the gem of the Gods. This gem controls how people
       act, and how
       people serve YOU. I stole right from my church and that is why I
       am in
       the meadows, that is why I was saying calm, and peaceful facts
       to myself,
       and I was walking with a fast pace. So if they find me, I wish
       you and your
       friends good luck, because they are coming soon. They will not
       spare me so,
       run my child. “When will dad come back?” my 8 year old son Sam
       asks.
       “He said he had a digestive problem, so he thinks a walk will
       help that’s all.”
       answers my wife who was just as inpatient as my son, but she
       tries to hide this.
       “Melinda, do you think we should look for Tim? It has been a
       good hour.” The
       Pastor interruptingly says. Suddenly the burglar alarm kicks
       off. Screams echo off the
       hollow walls. A church guard yells through a mega-phone “THE GEM
       IS GONE,
       I REPEAT THE GEM IS GONE!” Cops scatter out the back door, and
       –gulp-
       into the meadows. Now Melinda knows what has happened. She knows
       what she must
       do, and all the stress and fear blacks her out. She sees blurry
       images of a stretcher with
       a bloody body going into the ambulance cab, and Sam crying. The
       next thing you know
       is you wake up in a cold bed with no Sam, for what we know, he
       killed himself with the gem.
       To be continued..
       If this gets accepted Part 2 will come, and I have a BIG story
       line that I want to do,and I have to be a writer to give it out.
       #Post#: 5028--------------------------------------------------
       Re: The Gem of The Gods-Maxliam Writer Application
       By: blackmustangs075 Date: February 5, 2013, 10:35 am
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       This is really good! Accepted! I loved how you used imagery and
       your descriptions were great. You made some quoting mistakes
       (Every time you make a quote, you must indent and start a new
       paragraph) but other than that, it was great! I'll add you to
       writer right now. Can't wait to read the whole story in the
       Writer's Avenue! =)
       #Post#: 5030--------------------------------------------------
       Re: The Gem of The Gods-Maxliam Writer Application [Approved]
       By: maxliam Date: February 5, 2013, 10:49 am
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       Thank you. ;)
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       Re: The Gem of The Gods-Maxliam Writer Application [Approved]
       By: blackmustangs075 Date: February 5, 2013, 11:41 am
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       You're welcome! You deserve it  ;)
       #Post#: 5039--------------------------------------------------
       Re: The Gem of The Gods-Maxliam Writer Application [Approved]
       By: teamsatisfaction Date: February 5, 2013, 12:37 pm
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       Gratz, Maxliam! =)
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