[HN Gopher] Write Like You Talk (2015)
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       Write Like You Talk (2015)
        
       Author : ivanvas
       Score  : 91 points
       Date   : 2022-10-23 16:59 UTC (6 hours ago)
        
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       | legendofbrando wrote:
       | This is all true and I think mercurial is an excellent word.
       | Spoken and written.
        
       | coyotespike wrote:
       | Easy recent counterexamples include, say, Hilary Mantel,
       | Christopher Hitchens, David Foster Wallace, Helen Dewitt.
       | 
       | Each of these wrote brilliantly, in a style very different to how
       | most people talk. Some of them (Hitchens) wrote deliberately in a
       | "high style," successfully and delightfully. Others are, well,
       | simply themselves - Mantel once noted, "You simply cannot run
       | remedial classes for people on the page."
       | 
       | The plain style often misses the joy of language deployed for its
       | own sake, for play. It can be well done, but it's certainly not
       | the only legitimate style.
       | 
       | I will concede that for most people, writing for most practical
       | purposes, the Strunk & White school which Graham is channelling
       | is probably pretty good advice.
        
       | nmilo wrote:
       | I don't like this viewpoint at all. Spoken English and written
       | English are different languages, full-stop. You can see this in
       | effect when someone is giving a fully-scripted presentation or
       | talk---it just doesn't sound like speaking, no matter how
       | conversational the text is. This is in large part due to the
       | issue of word choice: speakers must choose their words quickly,
       | so they must transmit their idea using lots of small, common
       | words, while writers have time to think about word choice and
       | select the one that transmits the exact connotation the writer is
       | going for. And that's not to mention the nonverbal cues which add
       | a ton of richness to spoken English. Writing allows you to take
       | time to look over your words which lets you re-gain that richness
       | with poetic devices which really allow your words to flow in a
       | way that would sound unnatural and forced in spoken language. I
       | would go as far as to say that if your writing sounds good
       | spoken, it is not very good writing at all.
        
       | bennysonething wrote:
       | "The mercurial Spaniard himself declared: "After Altamira, all is
       | decadence." "
       | 
       | Actually I could imagine Neil Oliver would say something like
       | this in one of his documentaries.
        
       | kayodelycaon wrote:
       | The better than 95% of writers bit bugs me. It feels like looking
       | at all of written history and saying everyone else was doing this
       | wrong because they don't write simply enough.
        
       | rongopo wrote:
       | Having your voice in writing is a difficult milestone.
        
       | agalunar wrote:
       | Writing and speaking are such different media - for example, you
       | can go back and reread a sentence, but you can't wind back time
       | in a live conversation; you can signal how something should be
       | interpreted,* give parsing hints, and add emotion using
       | inflection and tone while speaking, but you can't do this in
       | writing. So I think we should expect good writing to look
       | different than good speaking.
       | 
       | PG might have in mind then the strange affectations that seem to
       | grip people sometimes when they write, but I can't think of any
       | examples off the top of my head.
       | 
       | *sarcasm, e.g.
        
         | dcminter wrote:
         | It's not, I think, quite what you mean, but when you refer to
         | "strange affectations" of writers (nicely put) I was reminded
         | of this:
         | 
         | "Words resemble fish in that some specialist ones can survive
         | only in a kind of reef, where their curious shapes and usages
         | are protected from the hurly-burly of the open sea. 'Rumpus'
         | and 'fracas' are found only in certain newspapers (in much the
         | same way that 'beverages' are found only in certain menus).
         | They are never used in normal conversation." - Terry Pratchett,
         | 'The Truth'
        
       | russellbeattie wrote:
       | Anyone who has tried to dictate something instead of typing it
       | knows how far off Graham is in this advice. Writing is a
       | different medium than spoken language and reading is different
       | than listening. Readers have different expectations than
       | listeners. The cadence of sentence length is important, and the
       | exact words you use count more. The pace of writing allows one to
       | pick and choose more carefully - being more descriptive or
       | precise as needed - and readers expect this.
       | 
       | He may have meant "conversationally," but that depends on context
       | and your audience. This comment has a completely different tone
       | than I would use in a professional document. Bad writing is bad
       | writing, whether it's an academic paper, a blog post or a legal
       | brief. It doesn't have anything to do with writing like you talk.
       | 
       | All that said, it is a good place to _start_ writing, especially
       | if you are having trouble organizing your thoughts or getting
       | started. Imagine sitting in front of someone and explaining to
       | them what it is you want to convey. Write that all down as if you
       | 're chatting. But then go back and edit. And that's a second good
       | bit of advice: Writing is editing.
        
       | mr_sturd wrote:
       | Whey if a wrert like a taa'ked, a divn't think anyone would kna
       | what a wa' gaan an aboot...
        
         | chromatin wrote:
         | What an absurd and pathetic characterization of Southern
         | Mountain Speech and/or rural American dialect. It comes across
         | as speaking more to your character than your polemic target.
        
           | mr_sturd wrote:
           | I meant it to read as if spoken by broad
           | Northumbrian/Geordie.
        
           | dctoedt wrote:
           | > _Southern Mountain Speech and /or rural American dialect_
           | 
           | Funny, I thought it was a phonetic transcription of
           | _Scottish_ dialect (whence are derived many Appalachian
           | speech patterns, of course).
        
             | mr_sturd wrote:
             | Touching on Scottish, but Northumbrian. I'm not that
             | "broad" really, though.
        
         | ant6n wrote:
         | Like a who/what?
        
           | Lukas_Skywalker wrote:
           | "like I talked"
        
           | mr_sturd wrote:
           | Yep, "like I talked".
        
       | Liron wrote:
       | Yet another pg classic.
       | 
       | When I first read this essay, it made me go from writing 90%
       | similar to the way I talk, to 100% - literally _only_ writing
       | words and phrases I 'd realistically say in a conversation. And I
       | think it's been a good improvement!
        
       | l33tbro wrote:
       | > But just imagine calling Picasso "the mercurial Spaniard" when
       | talking to a friend. Even one sentence of this would raise
       | eyebrows in conversation.
       | 
       | Why does everything have to be "optimized" with Paul? I'll take
       | verbose misfires any day over rigid plain-speak.
        
         | biorach wrote:
         | He wasn't advocating rigid plain speak
        
           | texaslonghorn5 wrote:
           | Ok, pretend you are Paul and then what should the author have
           | written instead of mercurial?
        
       | vlark wrote:
       | Horrible advice. Most people don't talk well; they ramble, they
       | stumble, they beat around the bush. Do not write in "simple
       | language." Instead, write in plain language:
       | https://www.plainlanguage.gov/media/FederalPLGuidelines.pdf
        
       | cole-k wrote:
       | A lot of this blog post reminded me of
       | https://www.orwellfoundation.com/the-orwell-foundation/orwel....
       | I am not well-read though, so maybe I just like to pattern match
       | to the few essays I've read that have stuck with me.
        
       | aasasd wrote:
       | Personally I advocate that people at least try to see if the flow
       | of the writing makes any sense when read out loud--if not, it's
       | probably just poor writing, stemming from a braindump with little
       | organization. And as the very minimum, it would be nice if people
       | stopped putting long-winded parenthetical additions in the middle
       | of unfinished sentences.
        
       | asciimov wrote:
       | > And in my experience, the harder the subject, the more
       | informally experts speak.
       | 
       | I guess I've been hanging out with different crowds. I typically
       | find that the harder the subject the more exacting the language
       | has to be to avoid miscommunication.
        
       | rocketbop wrote:
       | When I watch interviews of actors and other well known
       | personalities in the 80s compared to now I can't help notice that
       | the standard of spoken conversation seems to have dropped; lower
       | vocabulary, shorter sentences, more interruptions.
       | 
       | I think it would do a lot of good for people to try to speak more
       | like they write, rather than the other way around.
        
       | karmakaze wrote:
       | There is a good message here if you don't get distracted by
       | whatever may particlarly bother you about the presentation.
       | 
       | > You don't need complex sentences to express complex ideas.
       | [...] Informal language is the athletic clothing of ideas.
       | 
       | I interpret this as following my basic mode of operation: express
       | everything as simply as I can, even if that makes my brilliant
       | idea sound so obvious. The goal isn't to make myself seem smart,
       | it's to get the idea across. With practice this is natural and
       | you find yourself able to express more complex things than you
       | thought you could. If I use complex ways of describing less
       | complex things I'd be putting a lower limit on what I could
       | express.
       | 
       | Basically, how would Richard Feynman say it? He was a master of
       | using the simplest descriptions of the most complex subjects.
       | 
       | The same goes for coding style. There is a time where fancy
       | metaprogramming will be needed to make something compact and
       | manageable. But that isn't the first thing you should reach for
       | in simpler cases.
        
         | watwut wrote:
         | But the way people talk naturally does not lead to simple
         | sentences nor simple constructions. People talk in runabout
         | ways, add unnecessary details, miss others and then go back to
         | fill them in. Some people do in fact use complex words and
         | others use too simple wrong words when they speak. People use
         | tone of voice to add meaning and also gestures.
         | 
         | Transcript of natural conversation is not a simple readable
         | text. Instead, it requires a lot of editing to become one.
        
       | dasil003 wrote:
       | This is an unconvincing straw man argument. Bad writing is
       | just... bad writing. You can just as easily point to bad speaking
       | and say people should talk more like they write. The fact is,
       | speaking and writing are different, and even within them there
       | are different goals and styles.
       | 
       | While PG's plain-spoken dialectical style attracted me early, and
       | has been effective, I wouldn't call it the end-all-be-all
       | approach to writing. One problem with keeping things
       | conversational is that the substance of the argument can be
       | obscured by flowing narrative that sounds good but doesn't
       | necessarily add up. A dense, precise style might be harder to
       | read--and less politically expedient--but ultimately more
       | effective in establishing the merits of a novel idea.
        
         | jesuscript wrote:
         | Edit:
         | 
         | I re-read your post. You and David Milch agree:
         | 
         | https://youtu.be/SaE9cB6iHks
         | 
         | It depends on what you are conveying. Different approaches for
         | different situations.
        
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       | samatman wrote:
       | This is good advice if we ignore the headline completely.
       | 
       | If you want to see what I mean, record yourself talking sometime,
       | a few minutes is fine. Make a transcript, and read that. Ideally,
       | if there's someone around who can do the favor, have that someone
       | edit the errors in transcription and punctuation first, so that
       | part isn't conflated.
       | 
       | It's not going to look anything like good conversational writing.
       | 
       | The flip side is that someone setting out to "write like they
       | speak" will instead succeed in writing in a conversational style,
       | if anything. When that's good is another question.
        
         | kayodelycaon wrote:
         | I think the advice could easily be summed up as "write at an
         | 8th grade reading level".
        
       | spacedcowboy wrote:
       | I like a lot of what Graham writes, but I fundamentally disagree
       | with him on this one. Spoken language is the JIT compiler of
       | information transferral. It's spur-of-the-moment; it's stream-of-
       | consciousness; it gets the job done by stripping away a lot of
       | nuance and complexity.
       | 
       | Written language is more subtle, more considered, more edited -
       | he states himself that he writes then edits - in his case to make
       | it more "spoken". By doing this he is removing complexity in the
       | interests of simplicity, and this may well fit with _his_ goal
       | for _this_ work. It is not a general panacea.
       | 
       | I don't disagree that sometimes it is more useful to have a
       | simple introduction, leading to a more complex and better
       | understanding of a subject before layering on the exceptions and
       | subtleties - there is certainly a place for simplified knowledge
       | transfer, our entire system of education is based on this "lies
       | to children" approach.
       | 
       | What I do disagree with is that it's a useful go-to rule. The
       | world is inherently complex, and we deal with complexity by
       | introducing layers of abstraction (more of the "lies to children"
       | approach, but this time to ourselves). Not everyone needs to
       | understand the quantum mechanical physics of a positive charge in
       | order to understand that balloons will stick to your hair if
       | rubbed against certain materials, but if you're trying to
       | _explain_ that, then you read the room and go with the layer of
       | abstraction needed. Sometimes that abstraction is very thin, and
       | the language used will reflect that; at other times, "it just
       | does" is the way to go... party handbooks printed on balloon
       | packets are different to undergraduate textbooks.
       | 
       | So written language, with all its _capability_ for complexity,
       | context, subtlety and nuance should be employed when that
       | capability has a useful effect. That means understanding one's
       | audience and tailoring to suit, not just a blindly-applied rule
       | to "write as you speak".
        
         | c0mptonFP wrote:
         | You hit the nail on the head, mostly.
         | 
         | > then you read the room and go with the layer of abstraction
         | needed.
         | 
         | Finding the right layer of abstraction is orthogonal to the
         | write-speak axis. When speaking to my colleagues, I use
         | technical jargon that no layman could understand. None of the
         | topics are simple, or strongly abstracted. The issue of write
         | vs. speak is more about the sentence structure, sentence
         | length, and breadth of vocabulary.
         | 
         | But I generally agree that carefully crafted written language
         | can capture and transport thoughts much, MUCH more effectively.
        
           | mediascreen wrote:
           | Slightly off topic: What's with HN and the word "orthogonal"?
           | 
           | I'm not a native English speaker, but I read a lot in English
           | and it seems like the word is extremely common on HN compared
           | to anywhere else.
           | 
           | Isn't usually "unrelated" a more descriptive and even a more
           | precise word in most HN discussions? (The parent comment here
           | does seem to make a point using axes, so maybe it is more
           | appropriate here?)
        
             | auggierose wrote:
             | I see what you did there, but I will bite:
             | 
             | Orthogonal does not mean unrelated. Take two vectors in the
             | plane. Them being orthogonal means that they have a 90
             | degree angle between them, so if you know the direction of
             | one of them, the direction of the other one is severely
             | restricted to two choices. So these vectors are very much
             | RELATED. It's just that they are related in a way that
             | makes them maximally different in a certain sense.
             | 
             | So if you want to say that two things are maximally
             | different in a certain sense, you use orthogonal. If you
             | want to say that one thing has no influence whatsoever on
             | what the other thing is, and the other way around, you use
             | unrelated.
             | 
             | For example, if you randomly choose a point in the plane,
             | then its x and y coordinates will be unrelated, but not
             | orthogonal. The vectors [x 0] and [0 y] are not unrelated,
             | but certainly orthogonal.
             | 
             | Of course, this distinction is easily lost.
        
               | mediascreen wrote:
               | I understand that orthogonal and unrelated have different
               | meanings. What I'm wondering is: Isn't "orthogonal" much
               | more common on HN (18388 matches in search) than in other
               | places?
               | 
               | I suspect that "orthogonal" is a word programmers fall in
               | love with during some CS class and then overuse because
               | it sounds sciency.
        
         | cole-k wrote:
         | I don't see why what you're saying and what the blog post says
         | are incompatible. I feel like Graham is not saying "simplify
         | your thoughts," but rather "simplify your words." Think Up Goer
         | 5 (https://xkcd.com/1133/) but maybe not as extreme.
         | 
         | What I understood from your comment is that for complex topics
         | (like quantum mechanics), complex language is necessary. This
         | section of the post clarifies Graham's thoughts on the matter:
         | 
         | > You don't need complex sentences to express complex ideas.
         | When specialists in some abstruse topic talk to one another
         | about ideas in their field, they don't use sentences any more
         | complex than they do when talking about what to have for lunch.
         | They use different words, certainly. But even those they use no
         | more than necessary.
         | 
         | I kind of agree, although I don't know exactly whether I've
         | studied things that y'all might consider "abstruse".
        
           | YurgenJurgensen wrote:
           | Up Goer 5 is a fantastic example of why complex language is
           | necessary. Even in a short example, it already defines clumsy
           | replacements for the words it's trying to use, like "Sky Bag
           | Air" (Hydrogen), "Funny Voice Air" (Helium) and "Breathing
           | Type Air" (Oxygen). Other artificially-simple language
           | projects, like the Simple English Wikipedia* or Toki Pona
           | generally end up in the same place. You get the linguistic
           | equivalent of copy-and-paste coding.
           | 
           | Sure, "don't use more complex language than necessary" sounds
           | like advice, but anyone capable of working out the minimally
           | complex language needed for any given topic likely doesn't
           | need to be told this.
           | 
           | *A quick skim also suggests that in many places, the SEW just
           | gives up on simple vocabulary and uses phrases like "time-
           | independent Schrodinger equation".
        
             | cole-k wrote:
             | Just so we're on the same page, I agree to the necessity
             | for words like Hydrogen or Helium. And not gonna lie I get
             | a kick out of using fancy words that in today's English-
             | speaking world serve the dual purpose of implying that I'm
             | part of the educated social elite (although I like to
             | imagine this is not the reason why I like using them - I
             | digress).
             | 
             | > but anyone capable of working out the minimally complex
             | language needed for any given topic likely doesn't need to
             | be told this.
             | 
             | This is where I (and I think Graham) disagree with you. In
             | my opinion, this is very not easy. When I write -
             | especially about complex topics - I feel more comfortable
             | complicating my thoughts.
             | 
             | If you don't mind the anecdote, in middle and high school I
             | thought I was hot shit because my classmates would struggle
             | to write enough to meet the page limit and I would struggle
             | to not go over it. As it turns out, this is not because I
             | had more to say. It's because I would use twice the number
             | of words to say it. But it was certainly complex prose that
             | used fancy language - sometimes, I'd argue, parts were even
             | well-written.
             | 
             | I do still think there is an aesthetic to language, but
             | I've grown to believe that simple language possesses beauty
             | too. I can appreciate now how famous writers like Hemingway
             | could agonize for a day over a single sentence. Especially
             | because I look at the four paragraphs I wrote in response
             | and think to myself, "man I bet this is way more
             | complicated and rambly than it needs to be."
        
           | GeneralMayhem wrote:
           | > Think Up Goer 5 but maybe not as extreme.
           | 
           | I don't think this proves the point you want it to. Up Goer 5
           | loses a ton of information for the sake of its stylistic
           | schtick, and is borderline incomprehensible to people who
           | don't already know the information it's attempting to convey.
           | That's not a problem when you're doing it for comedic effect
           | or for its own sake; it's a big problem when you decide that
           | a devotion to simplistic language should trump actual
           | communication in scenarios where the message matters.
        
         | hinkley wrote:
         | I've outgrown a few bloggers. Spolsky still stings a bit. I
         | really liked his early stuff and then my frowns got bigger and
         | a lot more frequent.
         | 
         | The problem I found with blogging is that I only have about two
         | year's of things to say, and either I start scraping the bottom
         | of the barrel or I had to take a long break and then circle
         | back, reiterating 80% of what I already said but with new or
         | better examples. If I was forced to have an audience for ten
         | years I'd just be saying crazy shit all the time.
        
           | dehrmann wrote:
           | > I only have about two year's of things to say, and either I
           | start scraping the bottom of the barrel or I had to take a
           | long break and then circle back, reiterating 80% of what I
           | already said but with new or better examples
           | 
           | You sound like a Youtuber!
        
           | jesuscript wrote:
           | You are just circling the truth that ultimately we all really
           | have one or two things to really say to the world. And that's
           | okay.
           | 
           | Refining the few themes that you have conviction for until
           | the end of time is worthy. Hubris is if you think those few
           | things now qualifies you for all things.
           | 
           | It helps if your topic of interest has endless fodder.
           | Misanthropes know what I mean.
        
             | hinkley wrote:
             | I always wonder if half the time other writers are trying
             | to win arguments they lost somewhere else or if that's just
             | me.
        
           | kaashif wrote:
           | > If I was forced to have an audience for ten years I'd just
           | be saying crazy shit all the time.
           | 
           | There is an alternative. Just blog without an audience. Don't
           | keep any web server logs (or don't look at them). Delete the
           | analytics.
           | 
           | The fact that someone theoretically could be reading my blog
           | is enough motivation to write something understandable
           | (rather than just scrawling some gibberish in a notebook),
           | but whether that audience actually exists or not doesn't
           | matter to me.
           | 
           | There's no inherent need to write regularly if you feel you
           | have nothing new to say, is there?
        
             | paulpauper wrote:
             | _There is an alternative. Just blog without an audience.
             | Don 't keep any web server logs (or don't look at them).
             | Delete the analytics._
             | 
             | That depends on your individual preferences I guess. I
             | think having an audience is at least an indication that
             | you're succeeding at it. Otherwise you have a diary, not a
             | blog.
        
               | texaslonghorn5 wrote:
               | At least in my experience, writing is a great medium for
               | creative expression. It's a relatively permanent medium
               | to express the fleeting now. I can look back in many
               | years and remember and reflect on what I did and thought.
               | 
               | As long as you're not dependent on having an audience as
               | a form of income, I'd think the blog is intended for the
               | writer first and foremost, and having a readership is
               | secondary/optional.
        
               | kaashif wrote:
               | > I think having an audience is at least an indication
               | that you're succeeding at it.
               | 
               | If the goal is to get an audience, then having an
               | audience is a success.
               | 
               | If the goal is primarily to crystallize your own
               | understanding of things, write thoughts up in a coherent
               | way, or something else which doesn't necessarily involve
               | an audience, then you can have success without an
               | audience.
               | 
               | > Otherwise you have a diary, not a blog.
               | 
               | If the blog is still there for people to see, it changes
               | the kinds of things you write. I don't feel comfortable
               | posting half-incomprehensible jumbled thoughts with
               | partially worked examples, filled with mistakes on a
               | blog, whereas I would feel comfortable writing that
               | privately.
               | 
               | This does definitely depend on individual preferences and
               | whether one can motivate themselves to write well without
               | even the possibility of an audience. I can't.
        
         | omginternets wrote:
         | To add to your comment, it's also been my experience that
         | writing improves one's speaking. So to the extent that one
         | wishes to be more articulate in his oral communications, he
         | should not write as he speaks.
        
       | alanbernstein wrote:
       | Uhh no
        
       | paulpauper wrote:
       | Success at writing has almost everything to do with who is doing
       | the writing, not the quality of the writing or how clear it is.
       | Michael Crichton demonstrated this himself at Harvard by turning
       | in an essay written by Orwell, unbeknownst to the teacher, and
       | got a "B-". I have seen this as well. Why do Glen Greenwald
       | articles get so much traffic even though it's just basic
       | political commentary? Because of his brand.
        
       | legrande wrote:
       | Being grandiloquent does not equate to being more intelligent,
       | you're just being superfluous when more terse and lean sentences
       | are better.
        
       | jimmySixDOF wrote:
       | The old adage "sorry for the long letter I didn't have time to
       | write a short one" has some relevance here if you approach it
       | from the perspective of maximum efficiency and information
       | density. But that is not always the best path to get your idea
       | across. A conversational style presumes you have a longform
       | narrative and the extra elbowroom for nuance and variations on a
       | theme. I dictate a lot from inside a VR headset and I usually
       | work backwards from the spoken paragraphs to an outline form I
       | can then expand on at a later stage in an email for example. Just
       | sending pages of raw transcript is not great if you respect your
       | readers time.
       | 
       | As an aside, the best mix for me is doing Screen Recording
       | walkthroughs of some topic which can communicate so much more
       | info than a written description while keeping the conversation
       | narrowly focused. Video platforms like Loom, mmhmm, yac, Tella,
       | etc all these provide a better way to coordinate discussion when
       | integrated with typical tools like email and thread messengers.
        
       | secondcoming wrote:
       | I see some people on HN, presumably Americans, start sentences
       | with 'Like,...'
       | 
       | I find it annoying and it dims my view of the poster.
        
         | cole-k wrote:
         | I would encourage you to try and push past this feeling.
         | 
         | It's part of a natural change in dialect. There are instances
         | of prejudice toward similar phenomena such as vocal fry or
         | uptalk that have been shown to disproportionately be attributed
         | to women, even though this is not the case.
         | 
         | (https://scholarworks.arcadia.edu/cgi/viewcontent.cgi?article..
         | . some reading I found on the subject)
        
           | secondcoming wrote:
           | Like, nah, I probably won't.
        
       | extragood wrote:
       | I'm pleasantly surprised to see so many diverging with Paul on
       | this point.
       | 
       | "Why waste time say lot word when few word do trick"
       | 
       | My take is: don't let language get in the way of expressing
       | yourself. Language is one of our most important social
       | constructs. Restricting yourself to simple language has the side
       | effect of losing precision and/or meaning in communication.
        
       | bcantrill wrote:
       | As with so many things Paul Graham: there is a good, important
       | idea here (omit needless words!) but he overshoots the mark,
       | descending into venomous overgeneralizations. The truth is more
       | nuanced: speaking and writing are both important vectors for
       | communication (obviously?), but they _are_ different
       | (delightfully so!) -- with different strengths and weaknesses.
       | Great writing is tight: it crackles. If a word serves that end,
       | it should be used -- knowing that if someone like Graham wants to
       | decry the word choice as  "fancy", it reveals more about the
       | critic than the writing.
        
         | louison11 wrote:
         | And that, sir or madam, was a beautiful comment. I don't know
         | if you speak like that - and it doesn't matter.
        
         | civilized wrote:
         | > venomous overgeneralizations
         | 
         | Sorry, but this illustrates Graham's point even better than the
         | "mercurial Spaniard" thing. Reaching for a fancy word that
         | doesn't quite make sense in context.
         | 
         | Overgeneralizations could be absurd. They could even be
         | dangerous, perhaps - although Graham's alleged
         | overgeneralization really doesn't seem to be, even if wrong.
         | They're not venomous, at least not without an argument. You
         | can't just throw it out there for _effect_. That 's
         | grandstanding.
         | 
         | The slower, less urgent pace of writing allows us to overthink
         | things and make odd communication mistakes we wouldn't make in
         | conversation. Graham's advice is good for avoiding this.
        
           | GeneralMayhem wrote:
           | The venomous, dangerous, overgeneralized part is - I assume
           | intentionally - snuck in under the radar. Did you follow the
           | link on the word "bogus", and notice what keywords PG thinks
           | are indicative of bogosity? A warning against overwrought
           | language is one thing, but it's carried through to an attack
           | on _any_ complexity in written language (with no
           | acknowledgement that sometimes that complexity is necessary
           | or preferable except for nefarious reasons), and from there
           | to an attack on the caricature of the liberal arts that STEM-
           | lords love to mock without understanding. You start out
           | nodding along to the idea that  "mercurial Spaniard" is a bit
           | much, and by the end you're nodding along to the idea that
           | liberal-arts academia is a conspiracy.
        
             | YurgenJurgensen wrote:
             | That "bogus" link is also cheating. I can't hyperlink with
             | my voice, so hyperlinks aren't spoken language.
        
           | rfrey wrote:
           | >Sorry, but this illustrates Graham's point even better than
           | the "mercurial Spaniard" thing
           | 
           | Funny, I thought it _refuted_ Graham 's point, very
           | effectively.
        
       | paulpauper wrote:
       | The most successful writers in the world do not do this, and many
       | who do are not successful. Writing has to be much more precise
       | than speech. Speech has tone, cadence, and body language. Writing
       | does not, so you need to be articulate to get the the desired
       | message and intent across and most importantly avoid confusion.
       | And it has to be interesting enough for the reader to hopefully
       | not give up too soon. This is much harder than speech.
        
       | pklausler wrote:
       | I'm not going to write the same words that I would speak because
       | my reader is not going to process those words in the same way
       | that my listener would.
        
       | [deleted]
        
       | indus wrote:
       | Three core mediums that transfer human knowledge:
       | 
       | - spoken words (live events, political speeches, etc)
       | 
       | - recorded words
       | 
       | - written words (blogs, books, papers)
       | 
       | Spoken words have the highest activation energy. Hence, the value
       | that we expect is very very high. There is commitment of time.
       | 
       | Recorded words are speeches, discussions, lectures. Lower than
       | listening something live.
       | 
       | Written words have the highest volume in today's society. Also
       | the lowest activation energy for the writer.
       | 
       | If written words are not edited, thought through, the increasing
       | volume adds to the noise rather than a better signal.
        
       | r_hoods_ghost wrote:
       | This is mistitled. What it should be is "Write like I talk."
       | Sorry mate but not everyone limits themselves to the stripped
       | back, limited vocabulary of Silicon Valley demotic, even in
       | speech.
        
       | marginalia_nu wrote:
       | Eh so like I think this maybe is primarily good advice for people
       | who are good, like naturally good advice, no I mean speakers, not
       | people like me who like can barely keep the tail end of a thought
       | in my head... co- uh co- coherenty ... like.
        
       | GeneralMayhem wrote:
       | How much of PG's blog is based on setting up strawmen and using
       | them to bash on the liberal arts?
       | 
       | > Even one sentence of this would raise eyebrows in conversation.
       | And yet people write whole books of it.
       | 
       | These sentences immediately identify one big, relevant difference
       | between speech and non-blog writing, which is not commented on in
       | the blog post: _people do not generally give book-length
       | monologues on a single topic_. Books will necessarily end up
       | using more flowery language because if they didn 't _they would
       | be extremely boring to read_.
       | 
       | > perhaps worst of all, the complex sentences and fancy words
       | give you, the writer, the false impression that you're saying
       | more than you actually are.
       | 
       | On the other hand, simpler words and sentence structure give the
       | reader the false impression that you're being more honest than
       | you actually are. Demagogues (especially of the right-wing
       | variety) have known this for centuries: people like simple ideas.
       | Making an idea sound simpler, even if at the expense of _actual_
       | clarity, means that people will agree with you more readily. That
       | can be dangerous.
       | 
       | But even assuming you're communicating in good faith, sometimes
       | you really need the nuance that only more sophisticated language
       | can grant. In speech, we tend to do this by inflection, body
       | language, and gestures; in writing, those aren't available, so we
       | do it with vocabulary choice and more careful sentence structure.
       | In English (and many other languages), a single spoken word can
       | have dozens of different connotations, or a sentence dozens of
       | meanings, depending on tone and emphasis (see
       | https://bridgeenglish.com/blog/2012/08/28/who-stole-the-mone...
       | for a classic example). In writing, we have to be more precise
       | with the words themselves.
       | 
       | All of that said -
       | 
       | > If you simply manage to write in spoken language, you'll be
       | ahead of 95% of writers
       | 
       | is probably true, but I think it says more about 95% of writers
       | than it does about what's actually good. In most disciplines, the
       | techniques it takes to become "not terrible" are qualitatively
       | different from the techniques it takes to be "good". I would
       | posit that writing is one of those; the best writers are
       | fundamentally treating the written word differently than those of
       | us who just want to get through the day and be understood on a
       | basic level. Moreover, "top 5 percent of writers" is not really
       | that good, considering that most readers are reading the same
       | vanishingly small fraction of writers. Even in a professional
       | capacity, where you're going to read design docs and such from a
       | wider array of writers (as opposed to the extreme power-law
       | distribution of novelists), I'm certain that the top 1 in 20
       | writers in my company are read way out of proportion to everyone
       | else, and some of them are still terrible writers.
        
         | pwinnski wrote:
         | This deserves a call-out:
         | 
         | > On the other hand, simpler words and sentence structure give
         | the reader the false impression that you're being more honest
         | than you actually are. Demagogues (especially of the right-wing
         | variety) have known this for centuries: people like simple
         | ideas. Making an idea sound simpler, even if at the expense of
         | actual clarity, means that people will agree with you more
         | readily. That can be dangerous.
         | 
         | Well said!
        
         | dctoedt wrote:
         | > _How much of PG 's blog is based on setting up strawmen and
         | using them to bash on the liberal arts?_
         | 
         | It'd be surprising if PG wanted to bash the liberal arts, given
         | his longstanding interest in fine arts, specifically painting;
         | see, e.g., his _Hackers and Painters_ book. (He studied
         | painting at RISD and in Florence.)
         | 
         | https://www.amazon.com/Hackers-Painters-Big-Ideas-Computer/d...
         | 
         | https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Paul_Graham_(programmer)
        
           | GeneralMayhem wrote:
           | Liberal arts != fine arts
        
       | pwinnski wrote:
       | There is a good idea in here somewhere, but "write like you talk"
       | is horrific advice that very few people should follow.
       | 
       | "Write casually for a wider audience" might work.
       | 
       | "Avoid complicated sentence structure and unusual vocabulary for
       | a wider audience" might also be good advice.
       | 
       | People don't read in the same way they listen, so one should not
       | write in the same way they speak.
       | 
       | Or, to put it another way, "Gosh, I dunno. Seems kinda like he
       | didn't think that one through, you know? Maybe he knew what he
       | meant, but what he said sure ain't it."
        
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       | texaslonghorn5 wrote:
       | > But perhaps worst of all, the complex sentences and fancy words
       | give you, the writer, the false impression that you're saying
       | more than you actually are.
       | 
       | Disagree.
       | 
       | When you're writing / reading, it's much easier to parse complex
       | sentences. It's also much easier to express a cohesive, complex
       | thought this way compared to a meandering, directionless
       | sentence.
       | 
       | And the whole point of "fancy words" are to succinctly convey
       | some nuance rather than using a generic word which is much
       | broader. Check out the often reposted article about Webster's
       | 1913 dictionary. Also this is exactly the purpose of the
       | thesaurus. So yes, if done right, you ARE "saying more than you
       | actually are."
       | 
       | > The last straw for me was a sentence I read a couple days ago:
       | 
       | >> The mercurial Spaniard himself declared: "After Altamira, all
       | is decadence."
       | 
       | "mercurial" does the trick in the quoted example, does Paul have
       | a patch?
        
         | teucris wrote:
         | The Spaniard, known to change his moods on a whim, himself
         | declared: "After Altimara, all is decadence."
         | 
         | > And the whole point of "fancy words" are to succinctly convey
         | some nuance rather than using a generic word which is much
         | broader.
         | 
         | Which can be bad when you want your audience to understand you
         | without significant effort. Reading a novel, a reader may be
         | willing, or excited even, to expend effort to get all the
         | nuances and context. But if you're writing to communicate an
         | idea, you have to match the expectations of your audience, and
         | your audience may have a fixed effort budget to spend on your
         | writing. Most people know this deal, which is why I think using
         | big words is looked down on as self-absorbed or conceited.
         | 
         | I think similarly about code one-liners: they are super hard
         | for another programmer to read, and not everyone has time for
         | that. So they tend to come off as a kind of elitist bragging if
         | not done carefully.
        
           | texaslonghorn5 wrote:
           | If you're writing for an audience familiar with the word
           | mercurial then saying mercurial conveys exactly what the
           | author meant.
           | 
           | If you're writing for an audience unfamiliar with mercurial
           | then what you said is appropriate.
           | 
           | As is with a one liner, you wouldn't put that into a tutorial
           | but you might include it without description in a CppCon
           | talk.
        
         | 7speter wrote:
         | >> The mercurial Spaniard himself declared: "After Altamira,
         | all is decadence."
         | 
         | It's one thing to construct a sentence like that for a
         | fictional story or novel, it's another to write that way for
         | documentation or a legal document.
        
         | curo wrote:
         | There is something exhausting about that example sentence.
         | 
         | Yes, different words embed different meanings. For instance,
         | it's clear to me what Paul means by "fancy" and "complex." The
         | author William Zinsser makes both points: choose great words
         | and write like you speak.
         | 
         | But I agree that somewhere out there, beyond the horizon,
         | there's a time and place for the word 'mercurial.'
        
           | jameshart wrote:
           | Perhaps pg favors git over mercurial.
        
         | Cthulhu_ wrote:
         | That's it, it'll depend entirely on the context. Maybe if
         | you're selling something you should write like you talk, or if
         | you're posting comments / opinions on an orange/brown/grey
         | website, but if you're writing "A History of Ancient Britain",
         | it's not exactly you'd talk to your friends about; it's a book,
         | it's to educate and to entertain. Do you talk to your friends
         | to educate and/or entertain? I mean the latter, sure, but
         | people even change how they talk when they are entertaining
         | someone else, so. idk.
        
         | tayo42 wrote:
         | Fwiw Stephen King in "On Writing" also says to not use a
         | thesaurus and just use the words you already naturally know how
         | to use. He follows on saying your vocabulary will naturally
         | expand as you read more.
        
           | unethical_ban wrote:
           | The first sentence is about the writer; the second about the
           | reader.
           | 
           | If writers aren't learning new words, then readers can't
           | learn from them. When do writers learn new words? From
           | reading! Who writes what the writer reads? Writers.
           | 
           | King seems to be saying "the best way to discover new words
           | is through the labor and chance of picking up the right books
           | and finding some words you had not read before". So all words
           | that can ever be useful have already been written or will be
           | invented by fiction writers, and it is up to you to read a
           | variety of styles and types of fiction rather than the
           | compendium on your shelf. I find this notion silly.
           | 
           | The answer of course is a blend. If someone is leaning on a
           | thesaurus to make bad writing good, there will be a problem,
           | too.
        
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           | nathias wrote:
           | I often use thesaurus to translate complex words into simpler
           | ones, it really does improve the overall writing especially
           | if you are biased towards redundant complexity ...
        
           | js8 wrote:
           | Not an english speaker, but I use thesaurus when I feel there
           | might be a better fitting word or if I would repeat the same
           | word several times.
        
           | kayodelycaon wrote:
           | I agree with King on that. A thesaurus is great for finding
           | words you know but don't use often. Learning new words from
           | it... you're usually missing important nuance.
        
           | fnordpiglet wrote:
           | I use a thesaurus as a memory prompt.
        
         | paulpauper wrote:
         | Agree. Fancy' words can add flavor to the writing and help
         | avoid repetition, and also are more precise. If you are writing
         | warning labels or instructions, then maybe simpler is better.
         | But otherwise, I don't think it is a problem..
        
           | glenstein wrote:
           | And to make a point that perhaps is restating yours, or
           | overlaps with yours, I think some good writing is "dense" the
           | way that certain foods are calorie dense.
           | 
           | You can intentionally write in a way that's different from
           | your natural voice if your goal is, say, information density,
           | or expressiveness that conveys personality or that makes the
           | experience of reading more enjoyable, or to allow writing to
           | shimmer with all of its contextual entanglements.
           | 
           | Of course people can attempt to do this and make a reading
           | experience worse, and I think writing how you talk can be a
           | helpful rule of thumb for certain use cases.
        
           | mpalczewski wrote:
           | As a reader I would prefer the writer not repeat themselves
           | and write less, rather than try to find some fancy way of not
           | "sounding" repetitive, but in reality finding yet another way
           | of repeating. I prefer actual repetition to that.
           | 
           | More precise words aren't always better either. Having
           | someone easily grasp what you are saying works much better
           | for conveying information.
           | 
           | Complicated writing is lazy writing. "If I had more time, I
           | would have written a shorter letter."
        
           | elevenoh wrote:
        
         | freetime2 wrote:
         | > "mercurial" does the trick in the quoted example, does Paul
         | have a patch?
         | 
         | How about:
         | 
         | He said "After Altamira, all is decadence."
         | 
         | That is the way I would probably phrase it if spoken. Assuming
         | of course that "he" is clear from the context - if not I would
         | use the subject's name.
        
           | jameshart wrote:
           | And if you wanted to attribute that sentiment to some aspect
           | of his character and/or nationality?
           | 
           | I can perfectly well imagine saying out loud, in conversation
           | or in a spoken presentation, something like "Being the
           | mercurial Spaniard that he was, Picasso said 'After Altamira,
           | all is decadence'".
           | 
           | I don't think there's anything wrong with the _vocabulary_
           | choices here, but there is a kind of journalistic writing
           | style which favors brevity, probably originally because you
           | 're writing to a column inch count, and it drives writers to
           | try to convey those extra connotations in fewer words. An
           | editor will look at my wordy sentence, tell me to get rid of
           | the throatclearing and filler words and reduce it to "The
           | mercurial Spaniard said..." - and they may well be right.
        
         | caconym_ wrote:
         | > When you're writing / reading, it's much easier to parse
         | complex sentences.
         | 
         | All other things being equal, I think this is only true because
         | you can reread them at will and puzzle over them until you
         | think you know what the author was trying to say.
         | 
         | Sometimes there's value in that. A good writer knows how to mix
         | up the pacing of their prose, to organically guide the reader
         | into engaging more fully with the parts that communicate
         | complex ideas while the connective tissue disappears
         | effortlessly into the background. But in the hands of a less
         | skilled writer complex language is usually worse on balance:
         | they don't understand that prose should always be economical,
         | that less is almost always more, and many really do suffer from
         | "the false impression that [they are] saying more than [they]
         | actually are." Whether they're writing flowery romance fiction
         | or technical manuals, they get high on their own supply without
         | considering that writing is first and foremost a tool to convey
         | meaning.
         | 
         | The "mercurial Spaniard" bit seems fine out of context.
         | However, _in_ context it had better be clear who that person
         | actually is.
        
         | emptysongglass wrote:
         | I speak as I speak and write as I write. There need be no
         | competition between the two. What Graham is doing here is
         | reducing two very different media to one.
         | 
         | I love the rich complexity of language you can find in any book
         | by Gene Wolfe. Much of how he writes allows him to communicate
         | two truths in one thick sentence or leave us puzzling over a
         | philosophy. I'd never expect or insist Wolfe to speak as he
         | wrote. It would be a crime to his works and a crime to many
         | others'.
        
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       | Animats wrote:
       | No, don't. Your writing will read like a transcript of a podcast.
        
       | sebastianconcpt wrote:
       | When you talk you talk custom calibrating to who and the
       | environment (place and time). When you write that expands to a
       | whole lot more diversity of mindsets. As much as I like and agree
       | with many points that PG publishes, as general advice I'd say
       | this is terrible advice adding that it would be okay advice if it
       | would have been more modest, as in _Blog Like You Talk_ for
       | example.
        
       | gmuslera wrote:
       | For a moment I thought that the article was about using phonetic
       | language when writing in English, that may have some sense
       | noticing sound alike words that may not be always obvious for the
       | speaker.
       | 
       | But regarding using a different way to express yourself in
       | written and spoken forms, the media, the context and the timing
       | matters. There are some things that we may rely on gestures or
       | attitude that are not transmitted so easily in written form. Is
       | not the same talking to friends face to face, with all the
       | context you have with them, than to white sheet of paper. And you
       | have time, you are not pressed by the people you are talking to
       | to deliver the right word right now, you can make pauses, you can
       | check for the right expression, you can rewrite what you wrote.
       | 
       | It is not so simple, it have its own advantages, but it is not
       | for everything and everyone at all times.
        
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